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Evelyn K. Brunswick's avatar

This is totally immersive. You must have this entire world and its doings inside your head somewhere. In which case, I do hope you'll stick with this campaign setting because I like it.

And this is an excellently written and intriguing story, with deliciously drawn characters. When's part 2?

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Esther Chilton's avatar

Your imagination is fantastic, Nick. You do pull us in. Great characters, too.

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Nick Winney's avatar

Thanks Esther! lovely to hear from you and so happy you are reading my stories!

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Esther Chilton's avatar

It's great to see you writing and so well. It's making me want to find more time to write my own! Very inspiring :-)

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Nick Winney's avatar

Thanks Esther! there so many intriguing writers and styles here and some wonderful characters its a constant inspiration... good luck with your writing!

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Esther Chilton's avatar

Thank you :-)

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Keith Long's avatar

Superb! I do feel I’m given undue credit though lol all I did was make the image haha

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Nick Winney's avatar

thanks Keith!😎

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Hanna Delaney's avatar

Loving this, Nick. Very immersive.

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Nick Winney's avatar

Thanks hanna!

i got a lot of part 3 done over The weekend but im suffering from “have an idea but no ending” syndrome HAHAHAH!

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Hanna Delaney's avatar

Tying up neatly is a bitch. Good luck!

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Edward.Marlo.Ruiz's avatar

Super super intriguing and expertly pulled me in. Super well done like wow. Inspiring writing all around

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Nick Winney's avatar

Hey thanks man! glad you like it! as usual, my simple idea is now perplexing me as to how to end the story!

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Liz Zimmers's avatar

A fabulous tale of intrigue! I’m off to read the second part, but I feel this should be a book. The world you’ve created is magnificent!

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Nick Winney's avatar

hi Liz… I haven't quite finished it yet… but should be ready today! glad you like it 😄

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Wendy Cockcroft's avatar

This is a fun fantasy read. Rich in intrigued and borrowed history.

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Nick Winney's avatar

Thanks Wendy! that was the idea kind of pseudo latin alterative reality… part 2 coming soon I promise! just away all weekend!

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Lyndsey Resnick's avatar

This is such intricate world-building, Nick. And beautifully crafted. I can't wait to see what happens next.

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Garen Marie's avatar

Nick, your ability to weave these rich worlds is extraordinary! I'm so intrigued to know what's beyond the black hole.

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Nick Winney's avatar

Thank you Garen … it would never have existed but for your encouragement and inspiration. you should be proud of what you helped us all achieve…and i didnt for dark tidings! 😎

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Garen Marie's avatar

❣️❣️❣️❣️this makes my little dark heart happy ❣️❣️❣️❣️

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K.Lynn Grey's avatar

What do you call it when all the characters, other than the dead guy, have no obvious redeeming qualities? Fascinating. That's what you call it...

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Nick Winney's avatar

Thank you so much! poor Corbis isnt too bad...and you will probably feel sorry for baron vastus . a bit.

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Ken Flyingheart's avatar

Imaginative and immersive, Nick. I was racing through those diary entries; could feel you pick up the pace. I can't wait to see where it took you!

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Nick Winney's avatar

Thanks Ken. so glad those diary entries work... a few more to come...

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Zivah Avraham's avatar

You make me want to unearth my copies of the Gormenghast Trilogy, which I haven’t read for quite some time!

So immersive, Nick, so richly detailed! You’re a master at this style of writing.

Looking forward to the next instalment!

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Nick Winney's avatar

thats a huge huge compliment Zivah, thank you! still got a little bit of part 2 to write...

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Zivah Avraham's avatar

😊

I have every confidence it will be equally as wonderful as the first part.

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Jeannine's avatar

I've been sucked in! I'm awaiting part two as patiently as possible. 😉

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Nick Winney's avatar

Thanks jeannine...the end is in sight i rhink... maybe tonight... im just seesawing over some possibly controversial content...

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Jeannine's avatar

I can wait, seesaw away! 😎

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Andy Futuro's avatar

I saved this one for last and it did not disappoint. Could be a whole novel. 👏

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