you can read part II already and part three is out tomorrow. hopefully the intrigue will continue!
as for the ending... i just can't get happy with it! But I did enjoy trying to get the characters each to have their own voice.
this story was inspired by my overhearing a very strange conversation over breakfast at the George, an old hotel in Askrigg. all the places in the story actually exist and are very familiar to me.
I think you did get it right. Although I probably would've used a few ' for stuff like 'em vs. them, kind of thing. Mind you I'm not from Yorkshire, but rather a 'soft southern wuss', so I'm probably not the best one to comment.
I really enjoyed this and it was so wonderfully English!
So easy to get into - great first chapter and I am now sufficiently intrigued to keep reading...
Thank you Evelyn. very encouraging!
you can read part II already and part three is out tomorrow. hopefully the intrigue will continue!
as for the ending... i just can't get happy with it! But I did enjoy trying to get the characters each to have their own voice.
this story was inspired by my overhearing a very strange conversation over breakfast at the George, an old hotel in Askrigg. all the places in the story actually exist and are very familiar to me.
I love the dialogue! Well done! Looking forward to reading more. 😀
Flippin fantastic Nick
Oh thanks John! hopefully my enormous use of yorkshire vernacular wont annoy you too much....
i got used to it ;) - of course, I'm an agreeable Canadian, so---
hope you like the story! teh science is a tad ropey hehe
I'm intrigued!!! Great job with the dialogue, too.
thanks! im not 100% sure that I've got the vernacular right or that it was the right decision to do it at all.
I think you did get it right. Although I probably would've used a few ' for stuff like 'em vs. them, kind of thing. Mind you I'm not from Yorkshire, but rather a 'soft southern wuss', so I'm probably not the best one to comment.
Aye.... 'appen as mebby as might as 'appen as not as 'appen! A few apostrophes went awry for sure!
well the story is finished but its getting some tweaks. and there were three endings and im not sure i picked the best one...