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Evelyn K. Brunswick's avatar

This is intriguing... And you've really captured the sadness of the guy. Well, that and all his other emotions - it's very well written.

I am already looking forward to the next episode...

Nick Winney's avatar

its written - I want to finish the next bits of The Legacy before completing this. - glad you like it

Evelyn K. Brunswick's avatar

Yay! I’m very much enjoying both of these stories. You are giving us two at once! I like it!

Nick Winney's avatar

the legacy is much more fun to write. I love florid language and ridiculousness.

Mary J Hunt's avatar

I found this story to be pretty awesome Nick! Good job

Nick Winney's avatar

thank you Mary!... part II will be available next year 😀 ... 4 hours and 9 minutes GMT

Mary J Hunt's avatar

I will have to check it out. Next year is closer than we think!

Jeannine Lawall's avatar

Having had to visit doctors to have mysterious ailments diagnosed, this feels very real to me. And of course, sometimes they don't know what's happening. For example, my intermittent belly pains have been diagnosed as "Irritable Bowel Syndrome," but that's not really a disease, it's just a collection of symptoms... though I know how to keep the symptoms down to a dull roar, so that's something. And of course, me being of a certain age (64), most of the medical folks look like they just graduated high school. 😂 I'm looking forward to reading the next part!

Nick Winney's avatar

oh im sorry to hear about the "IBP"! hope things are bearable for you!

in this story... they know what's happening. they are the tunnel and the light....

Jeannine Lawall's avatar

I'm fine, I just have to avoid eating and drinking certain things and everything's hunky dory.

The tunnel and the light business... that's the scary part

Nick Winney's avatar

thats one of my favourite lines...